I don't think the commentary adds that much to the images. I would want less of an explanation of what's being shown and more concentration on the image.
I agree with the comment above. the commentary is too much for subject matter such as a cemetery, it kind of speaks for itself. I also suggest to find a focus spot in the cemetery and branch out from there
Excellent location. The video is a little shaky. With regards to the narration, I agree with the comments above. You mention that a lot of characteristics of cemeteries: worship, permanence, walls that protect the tranquility. I think that you can visually convey some of these qualities by carefully choosing your shots.
I don't think the commentary adds that much to the images. I would want less of an explanation of what's being shown and more concentration on the image.
ReplyDeleteI agree with the comment above. the commentary is too much for subject matter such as a cemetery, it kind of speaks for itself. I also suggest to find a focus spot in the cemetery and branch out from there
ReplyDeleteExcellent location. The video is a little shaky. With regards to the narration, I agree with the comments above. You mention that a lot of characteristics of cemeteries: worship, permanence, walls that protect the tranquility. I think that you can visually convey some of these qualities by carefully choosing your shots.
ReplyDeleteagree brotha! sometimes iwth the narration less is more!
ReplyDeleteI think with a steady camera (tripod) and no narration and music, this could portray the characteristics of a cemetery better.
ReplyDeleteMaybe less narration would be better. Also some music might be good with some transitions into the narration. Also, the video work is a bit unsteady.
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